Andy Murray vs Andreas Seppi, Saturday, Estimated time - 4:30pm BST - Discuss the match
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I've never noticed it before - it's rather good Smile

However, small grammatical points (hope you don't mind, seeing as it is main content Wink )

MurraysWorld.com already began receiving traffic from around the world


I would say that 'MW.com had already begun to receive traffic from around the world' sounds better?

weeks later the website turned into a very friendly community that is now known for its non-fanboy-like objectiveness of everything Andy Murray.


How about - weeks later the website had turned into the very friendly community that is now renowned for its non-fanboy-like objectiveness about everything Andy Murray.

An agreement on this potential move was not made because soon after the talks, Andy Murray ended his contract with Octagon for a smaller agency called AceGroup.


I'd put 'However,' at the start of this sentence.

which is to provide to the fans not the player.

to provide for the fans, not the player Smile

I know I'm being annoying, I just like everything on here to be the best it can be!


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Disagree on the first one, because as much as it might sound better it's not MW.com is it.

and are we "renowned" or just infamous on AM.com Wink

Agree with the last two.
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MW.com was just an abbreviation - I was correcting the bit that came after it, if you'd care to read it properly :P
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Fair point, I'd have to read it in context.... I'll get back to you shortly...

Edit: yes agree with the proposed first change.

Also agree with the changing of "of" to "about" in the second, but not the word "renowned"
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Thanks Laura and in all fairness to Neil, I also thought you were telling me to put MW.com but then I don't read thing carefully enough Smile
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Since we're picking up on things, In "The Team" section (which i;ve never looked at until today lol it says "joined" before every member of the mod and RTR team except for Julia.... Twice....
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Since we're picking up on things, In "The Team" section (which i;ve never looked at until today lol it says "joined" before every member of the mod and RTR team except for Julia.... Twice....
Well spotted Smile

However, small grammatical points (hope you don't mind, seeing as it is main content Wink )
I've made all the changes, thanks Wink
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